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The city that never sleepsle Mar 7 Mai 2013 - 0:03
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Noah never gets lost. Never. Ever. So where the fuck was he and why was he lost ? It was the fourth time he stood still, scanning the horizon with the hope of finding any reference point he could use, but it was no use. His mind couldn't track his location. What's the fucking use of being a mutant if your ability keeps fucking everything up ? Shit. He kicked a can, his hands buried in the pockets of his jeans, and sighed. This was bad. He had promised Gage he'd be back by 7, and according to his cellphone - which couldn't find a signal - it was currently 6:30. He'd be in deep shit if he was late. Gage was one of the last people on earth you wanted to get angry. The little guy wasn't the most patient person in the world, and especially loathed waiting for Noah. But this was hardly his fault, right ? He simply had no clue where he was. The streets still looked like the common New York streets, but it had suddenly gotten really dark. Furthermore, the silence was nerve-racking.

New York City, the city that never sleeps, was dead.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 21 Avr 2014 - 21:04
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Wouhouhou, ça fait plaisir, merciii, c'est grâce à toi 8D Maintenant je vais avoir peur de faire des fautes XD
Ahah, and I laughed at Unknown's unknown English XD Nice puns actually *thumbs up*

Anon, then. She grinned. Thanks for the notebook. She said, showing the one she did find in the desk. She dropped the bag of chips on the coffee table and bit her Mars instead. She sat on the couch, not too close to Noah who she suspected didn't want her, well, too close. She opened the little notebook and wrote the words "ANON - MET IN GHOST CITY". And since she still remembered the core and all, she also wrote "GHOST CITY - NO ONE BUT CREEPY ROBOTS".


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 22 Avr 2014 - 12:15
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Comedy gold 8D

• bite her Mars = bit her Mars; past tense of to bite is bit o/
• she wrote also = she also wrote (word order - also is an adverb here, and those usually go in front of the main verb)

He tried to turn it on nevertheless. The first few channels were just white noise, but soon he stumbled upon something more interesting. Hey, check this out. A robotic female voice echoed on the screen, joined with neat-looking imagery of something called the Enrichment Center. "Join Aperture Laboratories today and help make this world a better place. Enroll now."


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 26 Avr 2014 - 2:02
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Haaaan, ch'uis nouille des fois XD

Portal again!! Awesome! 8D

She watched for a few minutes, a bit stunned by what she heard and saw. She even noticed a core which was almost the same as the one in the store. And white platforms in white rooms. And lasers. And... Cubes? Okaaaaay... She carefully said. Did everyone enroll? She asked, thinking back to the city they met in. She had to admit that the advert was pretty persuasive. Which made the Enrichment Center a little scary actually.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 26 Avr 2014 - 17:19
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CUUUUUBES \o/

• Did everyone enrolled = Did everyone enroll (Did is ALWAYS accompanied by a verb in the present tense °^°)
• thinking back of = thinking back to something
• Witch = a homonym of which, except it means sorcière - I always make homonym mistakes like this if I don't re-read, it's horrible >_>

Maybe. He pondered over it for a little while. Or maybe they were forced to enroll. Those things in the store earlier didn't seem to be super friendly after all. And Noah strongly doubted everyone in NYC wanted to join a... well, whatever that Aperture Science Project was.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 29 Avr 2014 - 12:12
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Haaaan, j'ai mis une sorcière dans mon RP XD *se marre*
Purée, of/to, j'ai hésité. C'est la plaie ces petits mots ._. XD

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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 29 Avr 2014 - 16:09
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Omg, moi aussi. Prepositions. C'est un des pire trucs à l'anglais ça. J'ai dû checker pour être certaine parce que j'hésite aussi parfois XD

• averts = adverts (typoooo, cause in the post above it you wrote it correctly 8D)
• in infinite loop = in an infinite loop

They could've been releasing pheromones in the air that make people willing and susceptible to brainwashing or something. You know, like in science-fiction movies ? He suggested, while biting in his second Snickers bar. Do they give an address or something ? Cause if they did, at least he'd know where NOT to go...


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 29 Avr 2014 - 23:54
Prépositions (synonymes de prout, obviously) :
Han là là, bonjour l'inattention XD
Merciiii \o/

At first, she didn't get the point of his question but when she caught his eyes, it hit her. Oh ! She said. Actually they don't. And that was pretty odd. She finished her Mars bar in silence and then she added: Maybe there is an Enrichment Center in every town. I mean big cities like the one we left. Got lucky, I guess... She thought for a second. Or maybe they think there aren't any human beings anymore. Anywhere... They could've forgotten to stop the adverts.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 30 Avr 2014 - 10:44
Caca:
• she tilted = Typical French word, remember ? 8D
25/03 a écrit:To tilt means incliner, like in the sentence "She tilted her head". You'd have to find another way to express what you mean to say. For example, "that rung a bell" or simply "and suddenly she knew".
Here I would've said: [...], it hit her.
• there isn't any human being = It's not wrong per se (so I don't take off any points 8D), but saying it in plural sounds more natural. Like: They think there aren't any human beings anymore. Or if you want to keep it singular, something like: They think there isn't a soul left.

Nah. If they still have patrols in the city, they're unsure whether they've managed to get everyone. Cause that was what that thing was, right ? A patrolling unit or something. At least, that's what Noah suspected. But anyway. I don't know about you, but this shit got me kind of tired.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 23 Mai 2014 - 16:46
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Haaaaaan, to tilt ! Poisson Rouge a encore frappé XD
Bon, maintenant je vais m'en souvenir, c'est sûr x)

You bet. I'm exhausted, to tell the truth. Maybe sun would be out there after an hour or two sleeping. Or ten. Who cares. She gave a quick look to Noah and grinned slyly. I take the couch! She claimed joyfully. Actually, she didn't want him to feel obligated to offer her his bedroom just because she was a girl. Maybe he wasn't that kind of guy, though, but she didn't want to gamble on this. And the couch was comfortable.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 28 Juin 2014 - 13:55
Back in black:
• coach = couch, même erreur que avant il me semble. Un coach c'est un coach du sport, un couch c'est un canapé.

He really wasn't that kind of guy. He'd take the bed anytime. But offering it herself saved him a lot of trouble. He rolled up the wrappers of the snickers he ate, then threw them behind him. Yawning, he took her up on her offer. Fine with me. Scream if you see weird robots trying to break in and kill us, yeah ?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 30 Juin 2014 - 23:28
Aaaaaaaaaaaah D8 :
Mais comment j'arrive à faire ce genre de fautes again, c'est nul D8 *va se planquer dans un trou*

Sure! Same for you! She gave him a little wave and turned off the light as he closed the door. She lay down on the couch and settled herself into the cushions, arranging the plaid blancket around her body. She felt good and indulged herself in dreaming of a world with no threat of any kind.
She fell asleep a few seconds later.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 1 Juil 2014 - 17:05
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When you don't pay attention, you tend to make more small mistakes like these 8D And I bet you're the kind of person that thinks of five things at the same time, so you're screwed.

• the plaid = I would add a noun here, because plaid all by itself is usually seen as the pattern, not the cloth/fabric; so the plaid blanket, for example.
• dreaming a world = dreaming of a world

Noah could fall asleep anywhere, in any situation, at any given moment. Tonight was not an exception. He had barely put his head on the pillow, when he drifted off to dreamland. Problem was, even if Nameless did indeed scream, there was no way he would ever hear. When Noah slept, he was far far far away. You could've dropped a bomb next to his face and he'd still continue his little nap. If something were to happen... she'd have a lot of trouble waking him up.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Jeu 10 Juil 2014 - 22:37
Bah ! :
Zut, je croyais qu'on pouvait dire "plaid" tout seul, comme en français XD
Merciiiiiii Sichoux 8D

Unknown woke up suddenly and sat on the couch. She listened carefully for a whole minute, eyes wide-open in darkness... Nothing happened. She slowly lay back down and waited for Morpheus to come back to her. But at the time when he was almost there, she heard something and then he was gone for good. She sat up straight and soon enough the noise came again. It was a faint sound but she would definitely describe it as a metallic sound.

Bouh! :
Désolée si Noah n'entend rien mais je peux pas faire plus long sans me punir moi-même XD


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 21 Juil 2014 - 20:12
Mea culpa:
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaah, putain ça m'a prit genre 10 jours pour comprendre ce que tu voulais dire avec ton deuxième spoiler ! XD *sudden enlightenment*

• She slowly laid back = she slowly lay back down. Lay is the past tense of to lie (down) - for a person performing the action - and laid is the past tense of to lay - for objects.
• nose = typo, I suppose 8D C'est pas un nez qui est revenu, but a noise, right ?
• It was a murmur = I'm not entirely sure what you meant here, but I'm guessing something like "It was only a faint/slight sound" ? Because the way you said it makes me believe it was made by a human, because only humans can murmur in English. You can say "murmur" less literally, but usually it's accompanied by a noun afterwards, like... "the faint murmur of the wind" or something poetic like that 8D

Meanwhile, Noah, the true New-Yorker (yes, I read the spoilers in Zombieland), was still sleeping peacefully. Though only half on his bed, like usual. (He's a wild sleeper.)


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 28 Juil 2014 - 17:56
Wooot ! :
Nose ! Bwahahahaha XD
To lie/lay, my god, j'arrête pas de les confondre ces deux-là XD
"murmur"... Got it ! Thanks 8)

... ROFL la parenthèse Zombieland XD

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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 29 Juil 2014 - 11:47
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Aucune erreur \o/ And I hope I understood this well 8D It's Noah's bed she falls on, right ? Not on a ghost's bed ? (Though that would be amazingly creepy too.)

Unknown wouldn't be the only one swearing for very much longer. What did you expect ? There's a lunatic that suddenly crushes him with all her weight (no offense) (actually, yes, offense), and even if Noah is a hard person to wake up, a stranger invading his personal space will definitely do. He's not interested, okay ? I mean, I know he's hot and all (just look at that sexy booty), but come on. Have some class !

The fuck are you doing ?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 30 Juil 2014 - 1:02
Wooosh! :
A ghost's bed? Oh I love the idea but you're right, it's Noah's bed she falls on XD
Woooohoooouh zéro faute 8D *so happy and so proud at the same time*
Edit : bon, en fait je viens de découvrir tout à fait par hasard que "sweared" n'existe pas xD Ou ça dépend des régions ? **

And, oh my, I laughed so hard! XD J'adore tes parenthèses en RP XD

I, er, I heard a noise that woke me up and then I... I came in and... Crap! It hurts! She rubbed her foot, the pain painted on her face. By the way, she added with both pain and ask-for-forgiveness in her eyes, sorry for your... whatever I fell on. Wasn't on purpose, I swear! (Oh no, she hadn't sworn enough for the night.) And gosh, who was that guy? Yet she was certain he wasn't really a stranger.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 30 Juil 2014 - 11:14
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Yes, you are completely right ! To swear is an irregular verb. I didn't even see it XD I think you didn't make any mistakes in this post either, but hey 8D Double-check to be sure.

EDIT: HAH. NO. SPOTTED ONE ! I felt on, is wrong. It's I fell on. Fell is from falling, felt is from feeling. So unless she was touching him all over, wrong verb 8D

Yeah, yeah, whatever. This chick "accidentally" fell into his bed, right ? Suuure. What a coincidence. Noah might be an A-grade douchebag idiot sometimes, but he wasn't this stupid. Still, he decided to be the bigger man here, and ignore her advances for her own sake. Noise ? What noise ?


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Quand on cherche, on trouve 8D
Et mille pardons pour tout ce retard x.x

A Metallic one ? She frowned. I'm not sure, I hardly heard it, you know. On second thoughts, she wasn't sure she really heard something anymore. Maybe it was in her imagination after all...



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Hooked on a feeling:
YAY \o/ Alyaa is back !

Great. What the fuck did she wake him up for then ? Noah sighed. I'll go check. Just in case. Girls were frightened so easily. It was ridiculous. But in the off-chance that she actually did hear something... He lifted his blanket and stepped out of bed, sighing again out of pure annoyance (Noah needs his beauty sleep). In the living room or outside ?


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Because I'm happyyyy:
Héhé 8D

Outside! She said right away. At least, she felt certain of that. Although she wasn't sure why she felt so worried about it.



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Armed with nothing but his wits and still wearing his sleeping outfit (= shirt + boxers), Noah moved outside. He didn't think he needed anything more than this, cause he was convinced this was a false alarm. Soon, he'd be right back into bed.

Boy. He had never been more wrong.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 3 Sep 2014 - 0:24
She followed Noah like a shadow. At first, she didn't see anything. Then her eyes got accustomed to the moonlight and she discovered a black, three-legged, 4-feet-tall machine with three eyes searching the backyard. It didn't notice them straightaway but how long would that be for.

Unknown wished she'd never been outside with the guy.
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Je sens que tu vas avoir plein de corrections à faire, cette fois XD


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 3 Sep 2014 - 0:41
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Même pas tellement XD

• a black three-legs three-eyes 4-feet-tall machine = a black, three-legged / three-eyed, 4-f(ee)t-tall machine or [...] machine with three eyes
• It didn't notice them straightaway but how long will that be for = but how long would that be for (you switched tenses for no reason '^')

Noah muttered under his breath. Shit. He didn't know what the thing was, but it certainly looked like another enemy machine. Maybe it could detect lifeforms. Maybe it had tracked them. Oh, how he wished he had put on pants. Do you have a weapon ? He whispered. Or something that I could use as a weapon ?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Jeu 4 Sep 2014 - 17:15
Eye of the tiger :
Ha! Je le savais ! Je trouvais ça bizarre, mes three-truc, mais j'arrivais pas à voir pourquoi XD Pis la conjugaison, c'est ma bête noire : comme je me prends la tête dessus, des fois XD
Merci **

Unknown thought for a second but as usual, nothing came to mind. Although she knew she always carried something... Usually, she muttered, I have a hammer or some tool. But I can't remember where I left it. How did I get here, again ?


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