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The city that never sleepsMar 07 Mai 2013, 00:03
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Noah never gets lost. Never. Ever. So where the fuck was he and why was he lost ? It was the fourth time he stood still, scanning the horizon with the hope of finding any reference point he could use, but it was no use. His mind couldn't track his location. What's the fucking use of being a mutant if your ability keeps fucking everything up ? Shit. He kicked a can, his hands buried in the pockets of his jeans, and sighed. This was bad. He had promised Gage he'd be back by 7, and according to his cellphone - which couldn't find a signal - it was currently 6:30. He'd be in deep shit if he was late. Gage was one of the last people on earth you wanted to get angry. The little guy wasn't the most patient person in the world, and especially loathed waiting for Noah. But this was hardly his fault, right ? He simply had no clue where he was. The streets still looked like the common New York streets, but it had suddenly gotten really dark. Furthermore, the silence was nerve-racking.

New York City, the city that never sleeps, was dead.



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Re: The city that never sleepsJeu 04 Sep 2014, 17:43
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C'est ma bête noire en français, donc je comprends 8D

• nothing came to her mind = nothing came to mind (without the "her", is the idiomatic expression)
• he knew she always carries something = he knew she always carried

What ? Was she serious ? Was she trippin' ? Please tell me you're just tired and not on drugs or some shit... Cause he really didn't have time to deal with that right now. Just go inside and get something. Quickly. I'll keep an eye on this thing.


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Re: The city that never sleepsJeu 04 Sep 2014, 17:59
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XD
En plus, j'ai oublié un s à "she" >.>

Maybe she didn't tell him about her memory. Maybe she did and he forgot. Or maybe he wasn't in a fit state to give a shit. And for good reason. She ran back to the cabin without noticing the car parked in the alley. She searched the main room and found a frying pan and a monkey wrench in the cupboard under the sink. She ran back to the guy with her treasures.



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Re: The city that never sleepsJeu 04 Sep 2014, 18:23
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Oops 8D

Oh, hell yeah. That'll do. Noah said while he grabbed the monkey wrench. Women get the kitchen stuff and monkeys get monkey toys. Okay. Listen up. This is the plan... A big pause for suspense. We hit the thing. Got it ?


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Re: The city that never sleepsJeu 04 Sep 2014, 20:45
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Ahah XD

The best, the simple. Or the opposite. Jeez, she'd never know. Got it! She said. Her hands clutched harder on the pan and she started to move aside to take the machine from the rear. When she reached the exact opposite from her ally, she lifted the frying pan and...



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Re: The city that never sleepsVen 05 Sep 2014, 16:03
BAM ! TAKE THAT, MOTHERFUCKER. Noah had hit the thing in one of its three eyes, tactically thinking this would blind him somehow. (He had seen enough Hollywood movies to know the eyes were important in a fight). What he had not expected though, was for this piece of machinery to actually fight back. Which honestly is quite stupid. He shouldn't have thought it was going to stay here and be pretty.

EXTERMINAAATE. EXTERMINAAATE !


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 09 Sep 2014, 21:54
Unknown had hit the head and nothing happened except for a huge sound as if she had hit a big empty container. Awesome. She had thought maybe there was machinery in there and she would have damaged it. She was wrong. Ok. Don't freak out. Think! In a second, she rearmed the pan and hit a leg. With all her straight.


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Re: The city that never sleepsVen 12 Sep 2014, 11:34
Poopie:
• With all her straight = unless she slammed him with her presumed sexuality, you probably meant "strength" but mixed up the words XD

The robot didn't seem hurt at all. Its long head simply turned around to face its attackers, and in less than a second, hot red lasers shot out of its three eyes. No. Not three. Two. Hah ! Hollywood had been right for once. The eyes ARE important. Get it on the ground ! He instructed. And be careful for those beams. Perforated bodies still aren't in fashion.


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Re: The city that never sleepsDim 14 Sep 2014, 14:59
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Ah ben comme ça j'ai appris ce que "straight" signifiait en langage familier XD Merci d'enrichir mon slang XD

Before he was done talking, Unknown was already down, face against the ground, hands upon her head. Thanks for your kind, trendy advice! Appreciated! She said. Then, she noticed something. The robot had stopped firing at them. She looked up and realized they were too close to be shot at. And then Mister Minus-one-eye began to move aside. Let's move with it while figuring out how to deal with the lasers! She offered.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 08 Oct 2014, 16:12
About time !:
• your kind trendy advices = Advice is one of those words that has a strange plural. That is to say, you either say "advice" in singular (so "your kind, trendy advice") or you add "pieces of..." in front (like so: "your kind, trendy, pieces of advice"). This is because it's an uncountable noun, if you wish to inform yourself of the other uncountable nouns on the internet :D
• firing on them = "firing at them" would be more fitting
• whit = with, typo

That sounded like a plan to him. "Not getting shot" always sounded like a plan. It was a good plan. Clean and simple. Noah liked clean and simple. Nothing in his life ever was, so when it could be, it was good. He rolled on the ground as well, and crawled over to her, closer to the laser-shooting robot. How about we just make a run for it ? He suggested. "Fleeing" seemed like a good, simple, clean plan too.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 27 Jan 2015, 22:01
I'm aliiiiive! :
Merciiiiiii (en retard, oui, mais quand même) pour ces précisions !! J'oublie tout le temps que "advice" est invariable XD

Make a run for it, huh. She was up for trying their luck (to be honest, she didn't plan to roll all night long) but then she wondered... To where ? Do you think we can make it to the car and leave before it hits it and turns us into barbecue? Cause if you do, I'm in! She rolled again and noticed that they were close to the back of the cabin now. She eyed Anon.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 28 Jan 2015, 00:34
Adios, José!:
No problemo B)

• Make a run = to make a run for it is the idiom o/
• She was way up to try their luck = Je suis pas 100% sûre de ce que tu veux dire. Je crois que c'est un truc du genre (je vais le dire en anglais parce que j'ai aucune idée comment dire en français): "To be up for something" + "To try your luck" mashed together ? Since mixing idioms usually leads to confusion (in my experience at least), I'd suggest either separating this into two sentences like "Trying their luck ? She was up for that !" or to say "She was up for trying their luck" to minimize the change of idioms (= those damned phrases don't give you any space for literary creativity, booouh).
 

Go, go, go ! He yelled. I'll distract him... it... whatever ! Aaaah, Noah. Why must you always play the hero ? You're no hero. You like to pretend you are, but you're not. You're pretty selfish actually. And dumb, apparently. You don't know if the girl even knows how to drive. Because you see, if YOU distract the robot, and SHE gets to the car, SHE will have to drive the car up here with an open door, so YOU can jump in like you saw in the movies.

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Re: The city that never sleepsSam 31 Jan 2015, 01:54
Banga ! :
Han, ma créativité trahie T.T
Danke Schön \o/ J'ai encore appris des trucs XD

Unknown rushed to the car. She only nodded and then she was running without looking back. She hoped he was going to make it so she could too. Yeah, having someone around was useful. Until it was not. Anymore. Right now she thought it would be a good thing to remain a team. She ran so fast she literally dove into the car and started the engine. No, wait. Tried to. Oh god! It was already idiotic when happening in a movie, it was even more nonsense in real life.

Teacher! :
Au début, j'avais mis "she tought it might be..." J'ai hésité sur "might". C'est juste du présent ou j'aurais pu le mettre aussi ? C'est quoi le mieux ? *^*


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 03 Fév 2015, 15:37
Student!:
*fume sa pipe*

Well, well, well. A question, I see. I'll answer it after the "mistakes".

• Unknown rushed = Where to ? In this context, the verb "to rush" requires a bit more information. For example, you can say: "Unknown rushed to the car" or "Unknown rushed to reach the other side of the cabin"
• [...] remain as a team. = You can say "We should do this as a team" or you can say "We should remain a team". But when you say "as a" you imply you're going to perform an action, while "remaining a team" is something passive.

Then for your question, there is only a small difference in connotation (in "modality" if you want to say it with the proper linguistic terms 8D). Grammatically they're both correct. If you use "would" it comes off stronger than if you use "might". When you use the latter, you imply a certain uncertainty, while with "would" Unknown sounds more sure of herself.

Crap crap crap. Shit on a fucking stick. Where the hell was that girl ?! He could only "distract" a goddamn killing robot for so long... HURRY UP ! Rolling around like a madman, throwing rocks at it like an idiot, and silently fake-praying in his mind for her to hurry the fuck up, Noah was getting pretty tired. Actually, he was getting sure the bitch left him for dead. Women. He should've known not to trust her. CAN YOU HEAR ME, BITCH ??? She probably left you, Noah. Stop yelling.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 03 Fév 2015, 23:55
I *might* be grateful :
Naaaan, en vrai, I AM grateful! Thank you so much! 8D Je comprends tout quand tu m'expliques XD

She swore like a trooper. How useful. Then she leaned under the wheel and tore the panel out. She pulled the wires and tried to figure out the colors. In the darkness and all. Fuck this! She muttered. She stripped a few of them and began to try the engine. Piece of cake. And finally, it worked... IT WORKED! She crashed the pedal and the car jumped ahead to the back of the house, right door wide open.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 04 Fév 2015, 14:22
My path has been chosen for me:
Does this mean I was born to be a teacher ? /grin. Because I REFUSE. I bet my mom I'd never become a teacher O_O I don't like to lose bets.

• begun = began (Began is the past tense, while begun is the past participle. So basically if you just have a past tense, you use began, while if there is have/had/has in front of the verb to begin, you use begun.)

Holy shit. Thank god and Shiva and whatever other gods there are. Noah saw the car stop right in front of him and you can bet he was inside the vehicle in less than a second. (Okay, maybe not literally less than a second, but I'm trying to make him look cool, and describing how he stumbled around like an idiot is not gonna make him look cooler, is it ?) He slammed the door shut and yelled: GOOO ! The next idea was to make sure that woman didn't kill him in the car. We ALL know how women are behind the wheel after all. Dying in an accident after escaping a killer robot would be ridiculously ironic, huh ?


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Re: The city that never sleepsVen 06 Fév 2015, 01:09
Mine too, I guess :
Ahah ! XD I can be your no-student and you'd be my no-teacher-at-all *w*

Han, les verbes irréguliers x.x L'école est trop loin, je me mélange XD
MAIS ! une seule faute x) I'm getting better \o/

She didn't need to be asked twice. She needed to survive, you know. So she didn't even try to make a u-turn while being shot at by a wild robot. Instead, she rushed at the field in front of them. Fortunately, it was a cold night and the ground was hard enough not to slow down the car. You ok? She asked without looking at him, keeping her eyes straight ahead on the road-that-could-not-be-named-cause-it-didn't-exist-so-far.


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Re: The city that never sleepsVen 06 Fév 2015, 23:23
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And getting even better ! Zero mistakes this time 8D Very well-written too (but I never doubted that - I meant it sounds really "native-like" with the construction and all 8)) Only one small remark:

While it's not a mistake - since spoken language is kinda weird in any language - I just want to make sure that you know the construction of Unknown's question should be: "Are you ok ?" and not "You're ok ?" because these two phrases have different meanings. In the first she's checking up on Noah to see if he's indeed doing okay, while in the second she sounds surprised (like she can't believe that he actually made it ?! You're okay ?! HOW ?) There's also a third possibility which is very "spoken language"-like: "You ok ?" Of course it's not grammatically correct, but it's a very natural feature of spoken language (as it is in French). People who use this obviously just drop the "are" in front of the sentence.

That's all, folks 8)

Ok ? OK ?! I'd be better if you weren't behind the wheel, but yeah ! Yeah, I'm ok ! I didn't get hit by a fucking laser ! Also in shock apparently. You're in shock, Noah. Not sure if it's because a robot tried to kill you, or because of your sexism, which makes you think you're more sure to die in a car driven by a woman, but hey. Do we really care ?

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Re: The city that never sleepsSam 07 Fév 2015, 01:16
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Haaaaaaaaaan, no mistakes, native-like... I mean, 8D ! *danse de la joie*

Tu sais quoi, j'ai hésité pour le "you're ok?" Because j'entends bien dans les films/séries qu'ils disent "you ok?" et j'ai failli le mettre mais j'étais pas sûre de pouvoir le faire à l'écrit. Mais tu sais le plus drôle ? J'ai jamais pensé que le "are" qui n'était pas dit était celui qui se trouvait devant et pas celui du milieu XD So damn weird quand on pense que je comprends instinctivement des trucs comme "yer" XD Ahah !
C'est vraiment fun de progresser en anglais avec toi 8D

Merci ! \o/

Et j'ai galéré pour celui-là alors je sais pas si je vais conserver mon score XD

Well, you're alive, though ! And don't you dare give me the thank you stuff cause I don't need your endless gratitude. Yeah, well, she was in shock too. Plus, while she couldn't remember anything of her past life, she was certain she was a good driver. She felt it in her guts. (No she didn't but everybody has a dream and she really wanted to shut him up.) Listen, she said. You saved my life, I saved yours, let's forget it, ok? I won't tell anybody. If by chance, they happened to bump into somebody.



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Re: The city that never sleepsSam 07 Fév 2015, 01:55
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Les tiens me font rire aussi ! XD Unknown is so sarcastic. Noah deserves it 8D BY THE WAY, you're keeping up your perfect score. T'as peut-être galéré, but besides being friggin' funny, it's a totally faultless post 8D

Tch. Oooooouh. Are you really doing that ? The condescending tch-sound ? You know, I'm not so sure you're allowed to do that, being the asshole that you are. I mean, I don't wanna pick sides (I will anyway, just to spite you), but Unknown pretty much had every right to speak to you like you're an ungrateful little SOB*. Cause you are, you see. She just saved your goddamn ass and you're being a prick about it. C'MON NOAH. Now where the fuck are we going ?

*SOB = English 'slang' for "son of a bitch", pronounced Es-Oo-Bee (yes, like the letters of the alphabet) (you must've seen it in movies, but just in case 8D)


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Re: The city that never sleepsDim 08 Fév 2015, 23:29
Oh my fraking robot ! :
XD I think her memory loss made her sarcastic and all :p I'm really glad you like it XD (c'est drôle parce que je crois qu'en français, elle l'est un peu moins, et là tout de suite, je trouve ça dommage parce que c'est trop fun à jouer XD)
And... Faultless ? Gosh, I can't tell you how happy I am 8D
Je croise les doigts pour la suite ! \o/

Really? Was he leaving it up to her? Hmm. Besides the tch-sound, it felt close to a victory. Or at least, it really sounded like she had a point he couldn't argue about. Let's say she did. Cause it did feel good. Well, you tell me, she said. It wasn't my cabin. Given her memory problem, she wasn't sure it was his either. But she was used to make assumptions. Do you know what there is at the end of the fields? I hope not a cliff!


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 10 Fév 2015, 12:37
Linguistic shit:
You know it's interesting that you say that, because in actual life it is indeed the case that multilinguals shift between personalities/behaviors. It's as if a language connects you with a certain behavior. They did research about it. It's really interesting 8D And so I suppose it's pretty normal the same thing happens with our RP characters because when you think in another language, the other behavior influences how you write. So it's perfectly possible Unknown really is more sarcastic in English 8D /linguistics off


• Was he giving it up to her = Was he leaving it up to her (= Leaving something up to someone is the expression °^° In the sense of "he is letting her choose")
• Let's say it was = Let's say she did (you refer back to the last sentence (namely the "she had a point"), so it's: "Let's say she did [have a point he couldn't argue about]" and not "Let's say it was [*have a point he couldn't argue about]". If you want to refer to the point instead, you'd have to change the construction of the sentence preceding it, meaning: "Or at least, it really sounded like the point she made was irrefutable."
• Don't you know what there is at the end of the fields? = With this construction, you're giving the impression Unknown knows what there is at the end of the fields, and she's either surprised Noah doesn't or she is trying to make him guess. For example:

- I wonder if Nano. made cookies last week.
- Don't you know she made a hundred? [ implied: I thought you knew she made a lot! ]

- I think we should head West.
- Don't you know what there is West? [ implied: It's zombies and we'll die if we go there. ]

So, instead you should say something like: "Do you know what there is [...]" which is an inquiry. Here, Unknown would actually ask Noah if he knew, because she has no idea. (She just hopes it's not a cliff!)

Well, if you'd be helpful, you'd give me concrete locations (preferably without killer robots) so I could actually track a place to go to, and then I'd be able to assure you we won't roll off a cliff. I mean, seriously... if a robot found them in a cabin in the middle of nowhere, where the hell would they be safe? What place has no electronics?


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 25 Fév 2015, 01:01
Amazing shit! 8D :
Thank you sooooo much pour les corrections ! J'apprends trop de trucs, c'est tellement cool 8D

Quant au machin de linguistique, oh my! c'est tellement intéressant ! Tu sais que c'est une idée qui m'a traversé l'esprit parce que mon anglais est très influencé par le style de films/séries que je regarde. De manière générale, je trouve les répliques plus sarcastiques et mordantes que celles des films/séries français. Forcément, les expressions que je chope et que je donne à Unknown la rende un peu comme ces personnages désabusés ou pince-sans-rire (= ceux qui font de l'humour avec un air très sérieux), ou qui ont cette façon un peu ironique de dire les choses.
Ce que tu me dis sur cette étude me donne envie d'en savoir plus ! Je trouve ça extrêmement intéressant de constater qu'une langue peut influencer notre manière d'être. Parce que franchement, je pensais que la différence de langage venait des thèmes des films/séries en question. Apparemment, c'était très réducteur, comme conclusion XD

Caves? She said with a little hint of irony. But maybe he was right. She didn't know where the hell that robot came from nor why it shot at them, but she was pretty sure she didn't want to make that kind of acquaintance. And what about the tracking thing? Are you a robot too?


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 25 Fév 2015, 15:58
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Well, it must be an aspect of the whole phenomenon. (Popular) culture and society go hand-in-hand with language, after all. Our view on society changes our language, and our culture influences how we think and thus how we behave and speak. (Random example, but in Russian there are two words for "blue", so Russians will automatically see two shades of blue when we only see one. They tested this by making Russians and people with another nationality sort color cards in piles according to color. The other people made one pile of "blue" and the Russians made two different piles, suggesting that they categorize the world in a different way. There's a similar debate with linguists about the Hopi, who grammaticalize the concept of time differently, which raises the question: "Do they also have a different concept of time?" But that's something different entirely XD)

I actually do feel like my personality changes when I switch language. Not drastically or anything, but slight changes as "more sarcastic", as you pointed out, or "serious" or "childish". Though I feel as if it's related to my experience with the language. For example, French is a language I used to use when I was a kid and then abruptly stopped using it except for on the internet, so I feel more silly and childish using it. The fact that I don't use it in classes or in everyday conversation also contributes to the fact my vocabulary is limited, which makes me state things simplistically. (That's why it's also so frustrating to talk about serious subjects on forums or even to RP, since I always feel like people can't take me seriously, or I feel dumb when I don't understand >_> And especially when I can't express myself @@ IT'S REALLY ANNOYING. And it's very limiting when you have to write. I could write a perfect 4-page introduction RP in English, but I struggle with just one line in French. We should RP in French sometime so you can teach me too 8D)
Dutch is the language I use for emotion. When I get angry I express myself in Dutch. When I debate or express my opinion, when I want to talk about personal things or feelings and such. Probably because it's the language I use with family.
English is my more serious language, because it's related to university, classes, learning, reading. Of course, I can be pretty familiar in English and I use it constantly to swear (8D), but my vocabulary is way broader than French, for example. It's also kind of the language I prefer to use in public, because French makes me feel stupid and Dutch makes me feel unsure of myself, whereas English is clear-cut and to the point. Cool, huh ? 8D

*termine le monologue*

• she didn't want that kind of acquaintance = Okay, so, acquaintance isn't wrong per se, but it is very strange here, since it implies more of an introduction, I suppose ? I don't really know how to explain it so I'm going to use two three examples where 'acquaintance' would be more correct to use.

- Hello, my name is Nano.
- Hi, my name is George. It's nice to make your acquaintance.


= It's nice to meet you

- I saw you at the pub with R2D2 last night. Did you just meet?
- Oh no, he's much more than just an acquaintance. We're lovers.


= Someone who you are familiar with, but not closely

- Did you know the Hopi have a different concept of time?
- I wasn't acquainted with that.


= I wasn't aware of that/I did not have that knowledge

So, depending on what you want to say (e.g. Does Unknown not want to shake hands and meet a robot like that ? Or does Unknown not want to be familiar with why it came there and why it shot them ?), you'd have to change the sentence to respectively: [...] she was pretty sure she didn't want to make that kind of acquaintance (with it); or [...] she was pretty sure she didn't want that kind of knowledge/info(rmation) (or even [...] she didn't want to know)

Ps: HOLY SHIT. Mes messages deviennent de plus en plus longs XD

Very funny. Caves. Thanks for all the help. Did Noah really look like the kind of man (yes, he's a man - strong and proud) that was waiting for stupid shit jokes like that ? (The answer is also yes, but only if he's the one making them.) Her second question made him roll his eyes. Boy, you are on fire today. One joke after the other. Have you thought about a career as a comedian ? Then, to himself: A robot. A GPS. Never heard that one before. (Again, yes. Yes, he had.)


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Re: The city that never sleepsLun 09 Mar 2015, 15:27
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C'est. méga intéressant ce que tu me racontes là 8D
Le coup de la couleur pour les Russes, déjà ! C'est incroyable, mais quand on y pense, c'est logique. Et ça illustre à merveille les différences culturelles entre les peuples. C'est comme les japonais qui utilisent assez peu d'articles dans leurs phrases. Leur langue est subtile et se passe de certaines précisions parce que celles-ci sont implicites dans le contexte. Nous ne pourrions pas faire ça et pourtant, on se comprendrait probablement malgré tout.
D'ailleurs, c'est ce qui rend le travail de traduction si compliqué. Parfois, on ne peut tout simplement pas traduire un mot simplement parce que la notion n'existe pas dans l'autre langue ou parce qu'elle implique une subtilité qui manque à l'autre langue. C'est aussi pour ça, je pense, que les mots voyagent autant et que les langues sont faites d'apport des langues étrangères.
En France, les gens se plaignent parfois beaucoup de l'influence anglophone sur le français. C'est en grande partie dû au fait que la télé et le cinéma américains sont partout chez nous. Mais ce que les gens oublient souvent, je trouve, c'est que l'inverse est vrai aussi. Il n'y a qu'à voir la quantité de mots ou d'expressions bien frenchy que contient l'anglais. Et quoiqu'on dise, tous ces apports sont des enrichissements, pas des appauvrissement.

Bref, je suis entrain de changer de sujet, là >.>
Pour en revenir à ce qu'on disait sur la personnalité changeante en fonction de la langue employée, je trouve ça fascinant. Ton expérience est fascinante. Je ne savais même pas que tu avais parlé français quand tu étais petite XD (ou j'avais oublié **). J'avais lu des trucs sur le plurilinguisme et chaque article disait que les enfants/adultes concernés ne se trompent jamais, ne mélangent jamais les deux langues inconsciemment. Ils savent très bien séparer les deux (ou plus) et ce que tu dis de ton expérience donne une explication très valable sur le pourquoi du comment ils ne se trompent pas. Chaque langue étant associée à quelque chose de précis, même lorsque les deux sont parlées à la maison (dans le cas de parents aux langues maternelles différentes, par exemple).
Ça m'a toujours fasciné et je jalouse un peu tout ça parce que j'aurais trop voulu être bilingue XD (et j'aurais sûrement un meilleur accent si j'avais une meilleure oreille, et je sais que l'oreille se développe quand on est enfant, après il y a des sons qu'on n'entend plus parce qu'on n'a pas appris à les reconnaître – ils étaient useless donc le cerveau les a zappé).

Bon. J'arrête là le pavé parce que oh my, il y a tant de choses à dire sur les langues et leurs locuteurs 8D

And again, thanks for the corrections!!
Et pour un RP en français où I can teach you, c'est quand tu veux x)


Oooookay. Obviously, he did explain the tracking thing before. Maybe yesterday? Who knows. Well, if we have been hanging around since at least one or two days, you may have noticed I have memory issues. So I can't think about a place I know for its safety, ok?! I can tell you about famous monuments and that the Kilimanjaro is 3962 m at its highest point and I can even give you Michael Caine's filmography – what do you think about that, huh? Ok, she was upset. Again.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 10 Mar 2015, 11:30
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J'ai rien à ajouter 8D

• Well, if we hang around since at least one or two days = Only use the present perfect if you use "since", so: Well, if we have been hanging around since (...)

That's... great, I guess ? Noah didn't get why it was great. He also didn't get why the chick was getting all dramatic and upset. Typical female behavior. Period, perhaps? Stop the car. Let me drive then. Ah, this was perhaps what he was after all along. It is pretty emasculating to have a woman behind the wheel after all. Noah liked to be in control.


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