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The city that never sleepsle Mar 07 Mai 2013, 00:03
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Noah never gets lost. Never. Ever. So where the fuck was he and why was he lost ? It was the fourth time he stood still, scanning the horizon with the hope of finding any reference point he could use, but it was no use. His mind couldn't track his location. What's the fucking use of being a mutant if your ability keeps fucking everything up ? Shit. He kicked a can, his hands buried in the pockets of his jeans, and sighed. This was bad. He had promised Gage he'd be back by 7, and according to his cellphone - which couldn't find a signal - it was currently 6:30. He'd be in deep shit if he was late. Gage was one of the last people on earth you wanted to get angry. The little guy wasn't the most patient person in the world, and especially loathed waiting for Noah. But this was hardly his fault, right ? He simply had no clue where he was. The streets still looked like the common New York streets, but it had suddenly gotten really dark. Furthermore, the silence was nerve-racking.

New York City, the city that never sleeps, was dead.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 26 Mar 2014, 12:02
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RIIIIEEEEEN ! HAHAHA. T'as cru, hein ? 8D

He drove off as soon as she was in. Maybe this had been an overreaction. Maybe they could've taken on the mini-robot. Two against one, after all. But Noah wasn't the kind to take unnecessary risks. And they didn't know enough about that thing to plainly fight it off. Maybe it had lasers or something. Better safe than sorry. He slightly turned his head after a few seconds to see if they were being followed, but there was nothing in sight. Well...


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 01 Avr 2014, 01:21
Aaaaah:
Ouais j'ai cru XD

... Yeah! She said after a few seconds. Like he just said the most relevant sentence she's ever heard. She felt her heart beating hard in her chest, thinking back to what they ran away from. She didn't want to know if the core was friendly, she only thought about the lack of people in town. She eyed over her shoulder and then she peered into the dark roads in front of them.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 01 Avr 2014, 12:41
So much for getting food and provisions, huh ? Did you manage to grab anything or are we going to have to eat rope and matches ? The sarcasm was notable. Can't leave a man on an empty stomach for too long, huh. They get cranky and grumpy like women on their period. And what the fuck was that thing even ?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 02 Avr 2014, 11:25
I don’t know and I’m not sure I want to know. The thing scared the hell out of me! Really, it did. She pulled a face with a slight feeling of shame. Then she remembered a detail and she took something out of her shirt’s pocket. I… only have this. Gums. Okay but hey! she couldn’t have put a hot fish & ships in there. Sorry, she said. We’d be even more hungry with that stuff...



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 02 Avr 2014, 12:33
Fucking A. He sighed, hitting the steering wheel absentmindedly.  Okay, okay. So then I guess we'll do it the old-fashioned way. No more raiding. Get out of the city and try our luck in smaller villages or the wild. Wouldn't be the first time he did. Noah Hunter was, funny enough, exactly what his last name portrayed him to be: a hunter.

And so they did. The city, however big it might've seemed, eventually led to an end, and the first few miles outside the city stretched over large farmlands. Not exactly a forest, but it would do.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 05 Avr 2014, 01:04
Unknown looked at a corn field and hope started to rise. I hope we won't have to hunt, actually. She said. She was fed up with hunting. She wanted fatty steak with fries, she wanted ice cream, she wanted nutella! She wanted everything the world could offer her in a silver platter before the zombie apocalypse comes. Maybe we'll find a nice empty farm with a pentry full of food. Hope was now taking up all the space.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 05 Avr 2014, 16:29
Corrections:
• in a silver platter = Typo maybe ? It's supposed to be on a silver platter °^°
• pentry = pantry

If the outside world even remotely looks like the city, I bet we will. Luckily, the blue-haired New Yorker knew exactly where to go. His tracking abilities might mysteriously be out, but he still knew his state. I think I know a place that should be well-supplied.

Two hours (and a whole pack of gum) later, he finally stopped the car in front of a cabin in the countryside. You have arrived at your destination.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 07 Avr 2014, 12:43
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Nope, pas typo ! J'me suis vraiment trompée en fait XD
Merci \o/

Et j'ai une question à propos de "remotely" que je connaissais pas. J'ai regardé dans un dictionnaire mais j'hésite entre deux sens relativement opposés XD
Ca veut dire "si l'extérieur ressemble vaguement à la ville" ou plutôt "si l'extérieur est franchement différent de la ville" ? *w* J'aurais plus tendance à choisir le premier, vu les circonstances, mais je suis pas sûre à 100% XD

Unknown got out of the car and spat out her last gum, to her great relief. She needed real food. Nice place ! She said. Hoped so. She stepped closer and glanced through the dusty front window. It was pretty dark inside and she couldn't see anything. She climbed the door step and tried to open the door. Damn, it's locked. You have a key? She asked over her shoulder.

Heeeeu... ? °° :
Try + -ing ? Ou try + to + infinitive ?
La deuxième me semble meilleure mais c'est pas juste pour les trucs super durs qu'on n'est pas sûrs de réussir ? *^*


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 07 Avr 2014, 14:56
Stuff... things...:
• Remotely, according to the oxford dictionary (in this context), means in the slightest degree. So I would translate it as "Si le reste du monde ressemble même un peu à ce qu'on vient de voir en ville, j'suis sûr que oui." Though of course I can't guarantee this is actual French 8D

• For the infinitive or -ing form, it's tricky, because in most cases there is only a very slight difference between the two forms. Here, I would use the infinitive (to open), because it suggests that Unknown made an attempt but didn't succeed. Honestly though, they both fit. It depends what her intention was.

• stair = you should either use the plural (stairs) for this word, because "a stair" doesn't really exist (a stairway does though, and so do the stairs) or, I think the word you were originally looking for here, the steps.

Key ? Who the fuck needs keys ? He grabbed a knife out of the back of his jeans, and smashed one of the little glass windows that decorated the front door with the hilt. It was as easy as pie to get in from that point on. He slid his arm through the opening, unlocked the door manually, and the job was done. After you. He mentioned, as soon as he gave the door a kick.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 07 Avr 2014, 17:59
everything :


  • Cool, j'avais la bonne intuition pour "remotely" alors 8D *contente*
  • Je vais changer en "try to", du coup, parce que c'était ma première impression et que ça colle à ce que tu expliques.
  • En fait j'ai cherché sur wordreference en écrivant le RP et "stair" au singulier stands for "marche" as in "single step". En français, on dirait plutôt le perron, par exemple, pour désigner une marche unique devant une maison. Mais c'est vrai que perron est traduit par "front steps/door step". Du coup, j'en conclue que c'était un mauvais choix de ma part XD

Vais modifier tout ça ** Merciiiiiiiiii pour tout, Master 8D *happy*

With a slight laugh, Unknown answered to the invitation and walked inside the cabin. There were only two windows and some trees blackened one. She carefully moved forward and the wooden floor creaked under her feet. Suddenly, she felt something on her face and huffed. But fear went away when she realized it was the cord of a ceiling light. She pulled it.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 07 Avr 2014, 18:50
Stuff and things:
• Yes, stair all by itself would be in the context of large stairs. Like... imagine if you're in a house in front of the stairs, and you notice a stair is broken (out of the many there). For the stairs in front of a house or when it's only a few, you'd say steps indeed, that's it, you're absolutely right \o/

Sweet. It was exactly like he remembered it. Well, a little dusty perhaps, but Noah wasn't afraid of getting dirty. Despite the outside appearance, the cabin was rather large on the inside (like the TARDIS). There were several rooms (a bedroom, a pantry and a room secured with an electronic lock), and a living area with couches and a small(ish) kitchen. Most of the furniture was covered with large pieces of cloth to protect it from the dust.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 07 Avr 2014, 20:52
Stuff and... you know :
\o/

Oh, you know what? I love this place already! They began to remove all the furniture's protection and she discovered cozy coach and lovely kitchenette. And she coughed. A little. But she didn't mind at all. Soooo where's the pantry-full-of-food I've been dreaming about all the way here? 8D



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 07 Avr 2014, 22:16
Poop:
• cozy coach = Unless she found a human being in the cabin, like a football coach on a school's gym team, I think the word you meant was couch 8D

Third door on the right. And if you gotta piss, it's outside. Aaaah, Noah. Ever the gentleman. He made himself drop on the couch with a sigh, stretching his legs on the entire length and folding his arms behind his head. I fucking hate paranormal activity.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 08 Avr 2014, 01:19
Dear god! :
Bwahahaha, indeed XD

Yeah, you bet! She said while opening the third door on the right. She found a big pantry full of shelves full of food. She whistled an admiring whistling! We could hold our position for a long time. I mean... we have enough to sink a battleship! ... I'm impressed! She began to search the shelves, making lists from memory. Oh yeah, she could remember food very well.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 08 Avr 2014, 02:40
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Just repeating what I said in Skype so you can keep track of it 8D

• Hold our position = So like I said, I think it's totally okay since you speak of them as a team in this context
• She whistled an admiring whistling! = whistling is an adjective and you used it as a noun here, so that's a bit weird. You can just say: "She whistled with admiration"

Position ? Battleship ? What the fuck was that chick talking about ? You military or something ? How old are you even ? He asked while glancing at the pantry door. And then, as if it suddenly didn't matter anymore: Can you cook ?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Jeu 10 Avr 2014, 23:57
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Thank you so much!! \o/

She barely heard what he asked about the military and... Hey! Who asks a lady? She kept searching while ignoring him, making more noise with cans and stuff, but she heard his last question pretty clearly. What do you think I am? The skivvy? ... She thought for a whole minute. Okay yes, I can cook. But I won't always be the cook, understood? She said like they were longstanding flatmates and she'd be the one who's always on kitchen duty.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 11 Avr 2014, 01:14
Laughter in the distance:
Just a heads up, you're making her sound very very very British XD Skivvy. If she starts saying mate, I'm gonna assume she's Australian 8D I love it.

• She kept her search up = just "She kept searching" is fine (though you have to add a comma or a while in between searching and ignoring)
• pretty clear = clearly here, as an adverb, since it stands with the verb 'to hear'

Don't worry. I don't expect to be with you much longer. He honestly didn't. This had been fun and all (not), but he had a life to get back to. And she wasn't involved in it whatsoever. So what's your name ? He asked casually.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 11 Avr 2014, 01:41
Bwahahaha XD :
American, British, Australian... It could be any of these countries since she's not a native! I guess she learnt what she knows with movies and tv shows XD (like me, though)

Aaaaaah, et des fois je réfléchis pas assez à ce que j'écris et je reste stuck sur des bêtises ! Genre "keep searching", c'est pas comme si je l'avais jamais entendu XD *self-pokes*

Merciiiiiiiiii \o/

He kinda had a point. But she find herself not so eager to get back to Zombiecity. The robots excepted, she sort of like the place. She could spend some time here, with good meals and company. No undead, no patrol. Sleeping late and having a quiet life. She sighed. Unknown. She said. And then clarified : That's my name, Unknown. You?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 11 Avr 2014, 18:34
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You know, it might not have been intended, but it makes her sound lovely ! XD It's like a kid that repeats things it heard adults say, without understanding what it is. It's really cute 8D

• she find herself not so eager = This is a very strange construction in English. If you want to keep the construction, I'd change it to "She found herself not to be so eager to [...]", which would be syntactically correct, but it would still be more natural to say something like: "She wasn't eager to go back [...]"
• she sort of like = liked
• Real sleep over and quiet life = I didn't get this D:

Unknown ? He repeated skeptically. Are you fucking serious ? Who do you think I am ? A Facebook stalker ? Jesus Christ. I'm not gonna eat you. He sighed and rubbed his face. Fine. You can call me Anonymous then, if we're gonna play that game.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 12 Avr 2014, 20:59
Pee ? :
She's cute? Oh, cool 8D
  • find/found, like/liked... Je devais être bien naze quand j'ai écris ce RP XD
    "wasn't eager" ! Rhaaaa pourquoi je vais jamais chercher la simplicité là où elle est ?!! XD
  • "Real sleep over and quiet life" → de vraies grasses matinées (j'aurais dû mettre au pluriel, tiens !) et une vie tranquille/paisible.
    Désolée pour le manque de clarté ! J'ai sans doute pas dit comme il fallait encore XD *nervous laughter*

She giggled. No, you get me wrong. She said. I lost my memory. And I have no clue who I am since I don't have any ID on me. And no one around to tell me. So I named myself after my incapacity for remembering and I'll keep the name till the day I remember the real one. If I remember it. She shrugged. Unknown Yet, that's my name now.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 12 Avr 2014, 21:10
Pee and poop:
• Real sleep over and quiet life = Une grasse matinée is to sleep late or to sleep in. So it would have to be: Sleeping late and having a quiet life.

So people just randomly call you "Unknown" ? He raised an eyebrow. That's fucked up, man. Why don't you just pick a name ? If you have no ID and no one knows who you are, I doubt you'll get sued for it. Yes. Men on empty stomachs definitely get moody. Science says so. He stood up and walked to the pantry to go grab a snack. How come you lost your memory anyway ? Car crash ? Fell down the stairs ? Drugs ?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 12 Avr 2014, 21:50
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Haaaaan, je viens de vérifier "sleep over" et c'est pas du tout ce que je croyais XD Je sais pas pourquoi j'étais persuadée que ça voulait dire "trop dormir le matin" et donc "grasse matinée" par extension XD *boulet*
Je vais éditer 8D
Merciiiii !! \o/

I'm rather skeptical about me recalling my name anyway. She said, looking at him grabbing food on the shelves. I'm not sure the train crash is the reason why I don't remember. I mean, I forget people really fast. If we separate and meet again in a couple of days, you could be a complete stranger to me. She grabbed a bag of crisps and opened it. Maybe I already had memory disorders before that accident.



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Aaaaaaaaaah, I just got why you wrote sleep over XD You had a sleepover in mind ? Like a slumber party, where girls sleep at each other's houses. Okay, now I'm less confused. I was trying to understand what you tried to say but even if I translated it in French I was left wondering where you got the "sleep over" from XD

Train crash then. You should keep a notebook or a camera or something. Like in that movie... what's it called ? 50 First Dates, I think. Some kind of romantic drama about a girl with short term memory loss. She got married and had kids and all, but every morning she keeps forgetting about it, so her husband has her whole life put on tape so she can recall in the morning. Oh, Snickers ! Awesome.


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Ahah, oui XD Sauf que c'était pas du tout ce que je voulais dire ! J'me suis complètement mélanger les pinceaux mais c'était fun ! Et puis maintenant, je confondrais plus \o/

Et rien à voir mais je me demande si je me plante pas avec mon perso, too ** Je me demande si elle est vraiment capable de se rappeler train crash, en fait. Parce qu'elle oublie pas que les gens vu qu'elle sait pas d'où elle vient et tout XD On va dire que la faille lui donne des souvenirs bonus 8D Ahah ! ... Oui bon >.>

50 First Dates, huh? I remember the plot but I can't remember the movie. Maybe I saw the trailer at some theater. She thought for a minute, her hand suspended over the bag of crisps. Anyway, a notebook isn't a bad idea... I just have to find one! She giggled. Is there any Mars bars? I love Mars bars. Oh! And you didn't tell me your name, yet. Or should I call you Anonymous? She said with a sly grin.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 21 Avr 2014, 20:10
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Seriously, your English is getting better and better \o/ One small mistake and one remark only.

• bag of crisps = Note: not wrong, but British ! In American English it's chips. (Which means fries in British English.) Aaaah, English 8D But since Unknown is like a very cool mix of all kinds of English varieties, it's totally okay. Her English is... unknown after all 8) Lame puns.
• Is there any Mars bars? = are there, since it's plural °^°

You can look in the desk if you want a notebook. Might be something there. He suggested, while handing her a Mars. And yeah. Just call me Anon. Let's not get too personal. Armed with unhealthy snacks and energy drinks, he went back to the living area. There was a satellite TV, but he didn't assume it'd work all things considering. You need people to feed you programs, after all, and "people" was exactly what this place was mysteriously lacking.


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