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The city that never sleepsMar 07 Mai 2013, 00:03
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Noah never gets lost. Never. Ever. So where the fuck was he and why was he lost ? It was the fourth time he stood still, scanning the horizon with the hope of finding any reference point he could use, but it was no use. His mind couldn't track his location. What's the fucking use of being a mutant if your ability keeps fucking everything up ? Shit. He kicked a can, his hands buried in the pockets of his jeans, and sighed. This was bad. He had promised Gage he'd be back by 7, and according to his cellphone - which couldn't find a signal - it was currently 6:30. He'd be in deep shit if he was late. Gage was one of the last people on earth you wanted to get angry. The little guy wasn't the most patient person in the world, and especially loathed waiting for Noah. But this was hardly his fault, right ? He simply had no clue where he was. The streets still looked like the common New York streets, but it had suddenly gotten really dark. Furthermore, the silence was nerve-racking.

New York City, the city that never sleeps, was dead.



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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 10 Mar 2015, 21:38
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XD

Merci pour la correction \o/

Here we go! She thought. But then she stopped the car. And it was more to have some peace and quiet than to do as the man wanted. Plus, she loved to drive. As if it would change anything and you will be able to tell where we are. She mumbled, walking around the car. She sat, slammed the door et crossed her arms on her chest. Oookay, now she was in a sulk. So helpful, Unknown. How old are you again? Oh yeah, you don't know.


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Re: The city that never sleepsJeu 12 Mar 2015, 21:30
HRP:
• She membled = she mumbled
• helpfull = helpful

Poor Unknown D: Ça doit être horrible de ne pas avoir sa mémoire.
On fait un sujet français aussi alors ? \o/ If ya can handle it.

They switched places. Everything was as it was supposed to be now. Noah's mind was at ease. What the hell are you sulking for ? Are you a kid ? He commented, an eyebrow raised. He wasn't expecting an answer though, which explains why he drove off as soon as they both sat. In a few minutes time they were out of the field and back on some godforsaken road.


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Re: The city that never sleepsVen 13 Mar 2015, 00:08
Hell yeah! :
Rha, "helpful" et autres mots qui finissent avec des "l", je sais jamais s'il en faut un ou deux et chaque fois je me goure si je vérifie pas XD
Merci pour la correction \o/

Indeed, ça doit être dur ._.
On fait un sujet quand tu veux ! 8D

She didn't answer. She was in a sulk sooo... you know. But as the lights rolled out the road like a grey carpet, she simmered down. Actually, the adrenalin rush was over now and she felt sleepy. She struggled to stay awake. She sat up straight and asked : So? You know where we are, now? And there was no irony this time.


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Re: The city that never sleepsDim 15 Mar 2015, 16:01
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Les -ll ou -l y'a pas d'astuce, je pense XD Faut juste apprendre par coeur. Quoique la plupart est avec qu'un seul l, il me semble. (But don't quote me on that.)

• But as the lights rolled out the road like a grey carpet = J'ai pas compris. C'est un description poétique pour dire que les phares de la voiture "découvrent" la route cimentée ?
• adrenalin rush = the adrenalin rush

Si ça te tente, le sujet FR, tu peux choisir un de mes persos et ouvrir vu que j'ai ouvert ce sujet-ci 8D

Don't know where we are as much as I know where we're headed. He answered in that way that made it totally obvious he was trying to sound cool. You know: cryptic and mysterious. That was a thing now.


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Re: The city that never sleepsJeu 19 Mar 2015, 23:45
knock-knock :
Ahah, oui sans doute XD


  • But as the lights rolled out the road like a grey carpet = alors ouais, j'ai tenté la métaphore et j'ai l'impression que l'essai n'est pas transformé XD
    Je susi partie de "to roll out the red carpet" et j'ai personnifié les phares pour dire qu'ils déroulaient la route comme un tapis gris (référence au tapis rouge, toussa). Je devine qu'en anglais, ça n'a pas rendu aussi bien que ça aurait dû XD
  • Don't know where we are as much as I know where we're headed. = là (première fois, omg) j'ai un chouïa petit problème de-rien-du-tout. J'hésite quant au sens à cause de la négation du début (c'est parfois trompeur, ces choses-là **)
    Il sait où il est autant que où il va (donc ni l'un ni l'autre), ou il sait où il va, mais pas où il est ? **


Pour le sujet FR, je réfléchis à une idée et je lance 8D
Pour tes perso, y a que Jem que je connais pas bien (jamais RP ou lu un RP avec lui :p), mais au fond, n'importe lequel de tes perso, ce sera cool 8D (j'arrive pas à choisir, en vrai XD /SBAF/) Edit : si ça y est, je lis un RP avec Jem, en fait XD Death row really looks like fun, by the way 8D
Et je te retourne le bidule : tu veux choisir un de mes perso ? 8D
Edit² : OK ! Siv it is! XD

Et pour la réponse, j'éditerai :p (parce que du coup, je sais pas quoi faire, là °°)


How's that possible? She asked with a little hint of disbelief. Oh! And does that mean your brain's back on track? Yes, she did say it that way on purpose. Obviously. And with that, she smiled like a mischievous kid.


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Re: The city that never sleepsVen 20 Mar 2015, 01:10
Who's there?:
Alors, alors, Sensei-sama is here 8) /sort

It's a very slangish (so not exactly 100% correct) way to say il sait où il va, mais pas où il est, comme tu dis. "I don't know where we are, BUT, I know where we're headed."

Et pour ta métaphore, je crois que ça passe mieux en français qu'en anglais, mais j'avais compris quand même, donc du coup peut-être que ça marche 8D

As for French RP: Okay pour Jem 8) J'allais le proposer si tu voulais un RP XD Eeeeet.... j'hésite...  Je crois que je vais prendre Siv 8D Elle a l'air fun et je me rappelle pas si j'ai déjà eu la chance de la rencontrer en RP. (Patyaa si, Unknown obviously, Poioh aussi, Jez je garde pour plus tard dans X-men peut-être qui sait, soooo, Siv, you're my Pokémon *Noah's grin*)

EDIT: No mistakes \o/

He would just keep rolling his eyes at her, wouldn't he ? Ah well. It's possible cause I'm fucking awesome. That's why. 'Nuff said. No explanation needed. That was it, bruh. Deal with it.

... or maybe some explanation, as the signs on the side of the road indicated that Noah was driving exactly where that TV broadcast had said that ominous scientific facility was.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 25 Mar 2015, 01:24
Me ! 8D :
\o/

Edit : RP en français ici 8)

Oookey dokey. Awesome, huh? Right. Unknown didn't want to fight again so she let it go. And to say the truth, if he really did know where he was driving to, that was good enough for her.
So... how long till we get there?


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 25 Mar 2015, 21:22
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• so she let go = so she let it go
• So... how long till we reach there? = Okay, this is interesting because grammatically it COULD be correct, but then the meaning is different. If you want to say "Donc... combien de temps pour y/avant d'y arriver?" or something like that, you have to say: "So... how long till we reach it?" or "So... how long till we get there?". The sentence you used would only be correct if the sentence stress falls on "There" which would change the meaning to: "So... how long till we reach that-place-you-have-spoken-of-before-but-which-I-cannot-name". You know. In the style of "he who must not be named" = Voldemort 8D "How long till we get... there ?" *insert horror movie soundtrack here*

Almost there. And for once, Noah didn't lie. They arrived about ten minutes later. He parked the car in front of a big and ominous-looking scientific facility. Let's go take a look. He said, getting out of the car. What's that shit they say about the eye of the storm again? Safest place, right? Right.... sure......


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 01 Avr 2015, 00:44
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Thank yoouu ! \o/

The eye of the storm, huh?... Right, she said. But she didn't really get what he was talking about. I mean, she knows about storms and all, but she didn't remember the market and its robots, nor the broadcast that played in a loop on TV, so... You know. She only remembered ONE robot.
She glanced at the building. It looked like a lab or something. The kind of building you don't really want to get into.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 01 Avr 2015, 20:52
Me 8D who ?:
• the loop of the news = While this is a valid construction, English really prefers the apostrophe-s construction for the possessive. Saying "the handbag of my uncle" sounds so long and weird in a sentence compared to "my uncle's handbag". So grammatically I'd write: "the news' loop (or the news's loop, both are correct)". BUT, even with this construction it sounds strange, because you wouldn't really state what you're trying to say this way. Maybe say: "Nor the repetitive news message on TV" or "Nor the broadcast that played in a loop on TV".
• She only remember = I think you just overlooked the third person here: remembers or remembered
• The kind of building you don't really want to get in = into in this context. I'm gonna think about maybe finding a tip or rule of thumb for this one, cause I can't think of any off the top of head . I'll let ya know o/

So Noah walked in like he had something to prove. Maybe the fact that he had balls of steel. Or that he was fucking manly as hell. Perhaps even that the universe could throw shit at him and he'd fucking deal with it. Noah was badass. He felt badass. COME AT ME, BROBOTS !

... nothing. Silence. This place looked just as dead as the outside.
Well. That was anti-climactic.


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Re: The city that never sleepsDim 12 Avr 2015, 12:18
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Merci ! 8D

He almost made her jump. What the hell was wrong with him? Robots? Inside? I mean, it wa–... Oh dear. What did you forget, this time, huh? Fuck it! I might... put my foot in it but... What happened yesterday? I'm starting to wonder if I should be afraid of something. Are the killing robots everywhere?



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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 14 Avr 2015, 14:34
Just killed a maaaan:

• I might... put my foot in it = C'est trop marrant. Tu m'apprends des trucs ! XD Je connaissais pas l'expression donc j'ai dû vérifier. Apparemment c'est la version British de "put your foot in your mouth". J'sais pas si c'est bien utilisé du coup, mais j'ai l'impression que si o/

Ps : ça fait tellement longtemps qu'on a ce RP, que je me rappelle pas si Unknown l'a déjà dit qu'elle perd sa mémoire, donc j'vais faire semblant que non parce que j'ai la flemme de relire tout /sort


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Noah made a face. She was just fucking with him, right? Are you an amnesiac or something? Or were you just really high? Of-fucking-course there's not killing robots everywhere. But there might be. That's why we're here, isn't it? C'mon. Let's go check it out.

Lemme guess: you didn't write your shit down in that notebook, huh? He sighed. Why do I even try caring? He paused in his long walk to the other side of the reception area and turned around to face her. Do you want the long version or the short version?




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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 14 Avr 2015, 16:24
Life had just begun :
Haaan j't'apprends des trucs 8D Ben figure-toi qu'en fait, je connaissais pas non plus, je cherchais juste l’équivalent anglophone de "mettre les pieds dans le plat"... Et j'ai trouvé ça XD

C'est vrai que ça fait longtemps maintenant XD
En fait, elle lui a expliqué, même que Noah lui a dit qu'il s'appelait Anon quand elle lui a dit qu'elle s'appelait Unknown (et elle a comprit que c'était pas son vrai nom, mais de toute façon, ça aussi elle a oublié, maintenant XD). D'ailleurs, Noah lui a filé un carnet (qui a dû rester à la cabane) pour écrire des trucs comme dans je-sais-plus-quel-film-et-j'ai-la-flemme-de-chercher où la meuf doit regarder des petits films tous les matins pour se rappeler qui elle est ^^"
Bref. Let's just say qu'il l'a pas cru et puis voilà 8)

Notebook ? Yeah, the notebook had been left on the coffee table in the cabin. They left in a hurry and didn't pack their suitcases, so... Anyway. She needed to know. But didn't need the report to be too long. The short one. I feel that we don't have plenty of time. And that you're not really the kind of guy who tells long stories. She grinned.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 14 Avr 2015, 16:36
But now I've gone and thrown it all away:
Han nan mais oui ! Je me rappelle maintenant XD Attends, c'est mieux que j'édite mon poste pour la cohérence du coup. Ça te va ?


You'd be wrong. False. And also true. But mostly false. Noah was the "don't presume to know me" kind of guy after all. So false. But also true, because he actually did like telling long stories. Being the center of attention, that's what Noah was born for. If long lame stories made him that, then... well... true.  The short version is that we were pursued by a killer robot. You know. With death rays and shit. And now we're in its... their... lair ? I think.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 14 Avr 2015, 18:04
Don't mean to make you cry :
Sur, do it XD


Great. Look where that's got you! But heh, she had an answer! Lair, he said? Oh god, so there were so many, huh? I remember the three-eyed robot pretty well, you know. And you're telling me you brought us to the nest? Are you insane or what ? Yep, she wasn't grinnig anymore.


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Re: The city that never sleepsLun 04 Mai 2015, 12:13
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• I remember pretty well the three-eyed robot, you know.  = I remember the three-eyed robot pretty well, you know (= you say "I remember it well" not "I remember well it" o/)

Insane ? Highly unlikely. Not suicidal either. Noah thought he had a strategy. There's method in the madness, as they say. He thought he was pretty damn smart to come here. Stop shitting your pants. There's nothing here, is there ? He gestured to the empty area. Yeah, it was pretty dead. That didn't mean nothing was there, but it sure looked like it. C'mon. Let's go look around. He went for the big red doors across the reception desk.


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Re: The city that never sleepsLun 04 Mai 2015, 13:27
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Ah ouaaais XD Je me suis demandé ou le mettre, mais j'ai pas pensé à la fin ! Maintenant, je vais me rappeler le truc du "I remember it well" pour plus me tromper 8D
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She didn't answer back. She had nothing to add or ask. He was kind of rough, but for a I've-just-met-a-killer-robot-guy , he seemed to be nothing but... kind of sane to her, after all. She followed him to the doors and prepared herself for whatever could be behind. But the doors were locked and a female metalic voice came out of nowhere : Print control, please? And then a little pad came out of the wall.



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Re: The city that never sleepsLun 04 Mai 2015, 18:41
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Noah stared at the pad. He gave Unknown a look that could best be translated as: "What's the worst that could happen ?" and put his thumb on it.

Then the worst happened 8D


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 06 Mai 2015, 02:59
What. An. Idiot. She thought. But she didn't had the time for more. The pad disappeared so quickly she barely saw it. Then a section of wall – OF WALL – opened up and literally walked toward them. On the other side of the big hall was a winding staircase. She ran but when she reached it, the stairs were a ramp. DAMMIT! WHAT NOW? She shouted.


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Re: The city that never sleepsMer 06 Mai 2015, 11:29
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• Then a section of wall – OF WALL – = of the wall
• a winding staircase going up = I don't think you need to specify the direction of the staircase, but if you want to, it's better to say "leading up", because a staircase isn't an active object. It can't go anywhere. It can lead somewhere though °^°
• the stairs were a ramp = You mean the stairs disappeared and it became a sort of slide, right ? Then ramp is weird. A ramp is less inclined that an staircase (otherwise wheelchair users can't use it). I can't immediately think of a replacement for the word, but if you say something like "when she reached it, the steps disappeared" or "when she reached it, the steps folded" it should be all right.

Don't panic. Easy for you to say, Noah. This is all your fault. Why must you test fate ? Why ? Is it an alpha male thing ? Is it an ego thing ? Is it a douchebag thing ? It obviously wants us to go there. He pointed towards the section in the wall that was now opened (thanks to the piece of wall that was walking around trying to crush them or s'mthing). Noah already walked towards it, going against all logic.

And what was "it" ? Who was "it" ?


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 12 Mai 2015, 14:04
Deux Teluns sont sur un bateau :
• Haaaaan, WordReference m'a dit "pan de mur section of wall", le méchant èé C'est pas bon, alors ? éè
• Ah ouaaais, j'enlève "going/leading up" alors ^^ Meuwrci ! o/
• Je pige pas "folded" :s C'est "replié", peut-être ? Sinon, est-ce que je peux dire « She ran but when she reached it, the steps had spun and the starcase was now an impassable slide. »

Et heu...
• And what was "it" ? Who was "it" ? → "it" fait référence au pan de mur qui essaye de les écraser ou au trou qu'il a laissé dans le mur en se détachant ? Pas sûre d'avoir bien saisi XD /SMASHEDbyMr.PieceOfWall/


Whut? Unknwon was so surprised she didn't even try to argue with him. Different people, different logic. QED. Well okay, why not, right? I'm not sure it could be worse, so... Unknown followed Noah to the hole in the wall and crossed it like it was some door. But then, they happened to be in the wall, not in a new room. It was one metre wide and quite gloomy. Of course...


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Re: The city that never sleepsMar 12 Mai 2015, 14:19
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• I think that for the wall thing you used the technical terminology, which is weird if you're not trying to describe something technical. Overly specific, so unnatural 8D
• it = Sooooorry, I should've been more specific. En fait je voulais dire le it que Noah avait dit. Il dit: "It obviously wants us to go there.", already assuming that there is someone or something that is orchestrating the whole thing. And that someone or something wants them to go there.

• I'm not sure it could be worst = Bad, worse, worst → Noah is bad. Noah as a leader is worse. Noah as a leader on a bicycle is the worst. Here, you have to use "worse". Ps: rien à voir, but worst ça veut dire saucisse en NL /sort
• That was one metre wide = It was one meter wide → That at the beginning of a sentence either refers to something that will come immediately after or the object that came before. In the previous sentence, you ended with "a new room", so it would refer to that. Thus, if you want to talk about the width of the inside of the wall, you have to use "it".

Cozy. Noah grinned. This was all still very funny to him. Maybe it was just a way to deal with the fact that he had no idea what was going on. Make things into a joke when you don't understand them. The only way he could cope. Plausible. Either that or he was just really really really dumb. Noah slid sideways, moving towards his right in this strange open section of the wall. Who knows where this will lead? He hoped somewhere with food, cause damn... he was starving.


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Re: The city that never sleepsLun 15 Juin 2015, 21:57
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Haaaaan ! saucisse se dit wurst en alsacien XD

It was so dark in there but the second they set foot in the room, light happened. Well, not so surprising in that kind of facility, right? All robotized and all. Except for one thing. I'm sick of technology, really. She could have wished not to have left the cabin but hey, she'd forgot it already. The room was no kitchen. It looked like a huge library with desks and bookcases everywhere. And robots. Obviously.

May I help you? said a tiny one on the left.


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Re: The city that never sleepsJeu 18 Juin 2015, 22:21
Baw chicka wow wow:
• a intersection = an intersection → always if a vowel follows o/
• Unknwon = Roooh, Alyaa. C'est pas comme qu'on épelle le nom de ton personnage /sort
• It reminds her of some old games when you had to crawl = It reminds her of those old games where you had to (...) → This sounds better with "those" compared to "some", because you bring the reader back to the past. Also, some suggests a tiny quantity, and I think you can go larger here °^° The where is because you refer back to the games as a location. It's IN those games that you had to blablabla.
• convoluted = This sounds very out of place to me, because it's almost too technical. Easier variant maybe?

Mais sinon... j'ai pas compris ce qui se passe là XD Ils sont dans une genre de section entre les murs ? Dans mon post j'ai essayé de faire Noah ressortir du mur par une ouverture qui mènerait dieu-sait-où, une autre chambre, mais Unknown continue de marcher ?

Great. More fucking robots. At least this one offered help, not death like the other ones. No lasers pointing at their faces, no shooting, bombing, killing. A helpful robot. A little one. Noah could handle this shit. Yeaaah, I guess. He started. What can you tell us about this place, lil' guy? Knowledge is power, right? Who said that again? Gage or some Indian guru?


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Re: The city that never sleepsVen 19 Juin 2015, 01:08
Chicka chicka wow:
Oh god! J'avais pas compris du tout XD My mistake =.=
Je réécrirai, mais pas ce soir, chuis trop crevée. D'ailleurs, j'étais fatiguée quand j'ai écrit la réponse et les "a" et "Unknwon", c'était évidemment des typo XD Pis where/when, j'ai hésité nomdidiou >< Pis je vais sans doute virer convoluted vu que toute façon, faut que je change tout le post XD /TREE-EYED-ROBOT/

Je te préviendrai quand j'aurai édité ;)


Certainly, Sir. You're in the library of Genesis Incorporated. It's the biggest library of the United States of America and I'll be glad to provide any document you're looking for, Sir. Unknown stared at it with both contempt and disbelief. Oookey, that was not the question, genius. Even I got that. So what's Genesis Incorporated?



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