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The city that never sleepsle Mar 07 Mai 2013, 00:03
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Noah never gets lost. Never. Ever. So where the fuck was he and why was he lost ? It was the fourth time he stood still, scanning the horizon with the hope of finding any reference point he could use, but it was no use. His mind couldn't track his location. What's the fucking use of being a mutant if your ability keeps fucking everything up ? Shit. He kicked a can, his hands buried in the pockets of his jeans, and sighed. This was bad. He had promised Gage he'd be back by 7, and according to his cellphone - which couldn't find a signal - it was currently 6:30. He'd be in deep shit if he was late. Gage was one of the last people on earth you wanted to get angry. The little guy wasn't the most patient person in the world, and especially loathed waiting for Noah. But this was hardly his fault, right ? He simply had no clue where he was. The streets still looked like the common New York streets, but it had suddenly gotten really dark. Furthermore, the silence was nerve-racking.

New York City, the city that never sleeps, was dead.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 22 Mar 2016, 13:47
Ok, here you go:
and she definitely want to try itand she definitely wanted to try it (since you used the past tense in the first part of the sentence as well ; otherwise it would've have to have been "she wants to try it")

Pff, what an idiot. They literally just learned how to do it and she already messed up? Obviously this chick wasn't reliable. Noah didn't comment (IT'S A MIRACLE, PRAISE JESUS) and simply walked through Unknown's portal so he could walk onto the platform. C'mon, what are you waiting for?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 22 Mar 2016, 23:24
Thanks. *draws... pretty badly, actually* :
Haaaan, mais c'te faute, c'la honte XD Il était pas 2h du mat, pourtant !

(Dear Jesus... Ok sorry, let's start again.) She stepped through the portal and soon was on the platform with him. The door opened right when she arrived and she said: This is fucking funny. I don't know where we're going but I like it. Then she passed through the door and the translucent blue field... And she forgot again. She got down the stairs and the lift appeared. Oh boy! She  thought. Where am I again?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 25 Mar 2016, 13:18
You look even worse now:
she past the doorPast = passé, opposite of future vs. passed = past tense of "to pass" (t'as déjà fait l'erreur, je crois) ; ici ça devrait être "She passed through the door", parce que sinon elle marche à côté.

You look so damn confused all the time. Noah commented, watching her face skeptically. Maybe it was just her neutral face, like how some chicks have a resting bitch face, but Noah had a real* bad feeling about it. He really didn't need any more shit today (was it still "today"?) and Unknown looked like a whole bunch of shit tied neatly together in one shitty brain.


*not correct grammatically: normally you'd say "really bad feeling", but "real bad" is slang


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 26 Mar 2016, 00:50
No, I- ... Okay you're right... What have I done? éè :
Oh boy, c'est vrai que j'ai déjà fait la faute, ça craint XD Merci !
*thumbs up pour l'astérisque* 8D

Yeah she was confused. She usually had to deal with memory loss when she woke up. But she had not slept right before they ended up here, right? Something was so wrong about this place. She stepped into the elevator and asked: For how long do you think we've been here? And his face actually ringed a bell, which meant they hadn't just met.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Jeu 21 Avr 2016, 12:08
I knew you'd regret this.:
But she wasn't sleeping right before they ended up here, right? → You have to use the past perfect with temporal verbs like "before", so : But she had not slept before they ended up here, right?

Noah shrugged. No fucking idea. His attitude clearly showed he didn't care either. His priority was finding what had wiped humanity away. Who cares about sleep and food and the bare necessities? Something was trying to kill them and he had found a funny gun. Life didn't make sense anymore. Keeping track of time was just a silly notion, really.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 17 Mai 2016, 22:27
So why didn't you tell me? :
*thumbs up*

Okay, shouldn't expect any hints from that guy, I guess. The lift stopped and they stepped out of it. They entered a big room seperated by some kind of... water? No, definitely not. It looked more like petrol or something. The room was white on their side and rusty on the other side. On the left, there was a pole with a red button, and on the right, there was a much bigger button on the floor. Bewildered, Unknown pressed the little button. A sound echoed and a cube fell from nowhere –correction– from a tube above.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 15 Juin 2016, 00:12
I didn't think you'd randomly shave your eyebrows.:
Okay, no hint is to expect from the guy, I guess. → Okay, (I) shouldn't expect any hints from that/this guy, I guess : That because you refer to someone that is there, and not an unknown entity you haven't previously mentioned. In other words, it's known information (that) vs. new information (the) ; and otherwise, the construction is awkward. If you wanna keep it, it has to be "No hint is to be expected from that/this guy" but still sounds quite heavy.

For the room : It's gonna be fucking hard to explain what they look like XD I'm not sure I got it right, but we'll improvise if we get it wrong or it's impossible to establish without drawing it out. (Or designing it, hahaha.)

Noah witnessed the cube fall into the liquid and disintegrate. That looks like acid, he commented, and we'll want to avoid falling in... A genius deduction. It was to be expected of him, really. Everything that came out of Noah's mouth was golden.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Dim 03 Juil 2016, 14:00
I though it was a good idea... Not sure about that, right now :
Tutafé d'accord pour les rooms. On n'y arrivera jamais avec 4 lignes anyway XD

Right. Said Unknown with a bit of disdain. So what now? How do we reach the exit? Unaware of the previous rooms, she'd forgotten about the portal gun again, so she was looking for any mechanism (hidden bridge or whatever) that would allow them to cross the pool safely. She stepped on the big button on the floor and a flat blue line appeared up in the air.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Jeu 07 Juil 2016, 16:30
Evidently:
she'd forgotten again about the portal gun → word order: "she'd forgotten about the portal gun again" OR "she'd again forgotten about the portal gun" (me prefers the first one)
to let them cross → [any mechanism] that would allow them to cross / that would let them cross

Huh. So I guess we use the bridge. Noah remarked. Though if Unknown wanted to get across, she'd have to get off the button, and if she did, the bridge would disappear. Ok, I get it. We need that cube to make sure neither of us is standing on the button and we can both use the bridge. The thing he didn't like was that this test apparently required some trust. If he was standing on that bridge to catch the cube, and Unknown stepped aside, it was "bye-bye Noah"... and Noah was not a trusting person.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 08 Juil 2016, 13:26
Unknown only got it because he said it – that and the fact that the bridge appeared right where the cube had fallen. But she didn't know how they would reach the bridge yet. She looked at the gun with bafflement but before she figured out its purpose, Noah was already using it to put the bridge down. She tried not to look too amazed and held herself back from using the gun too.

Can you make them grow again? :
J'ai tellement l'impression d'avoir écrit un truc plein de fautes, right now ><
And hooooow difficult it is to RP avec une perte de mémoire aussi rapide XD (Mais c'est très marrant !


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 13 Juil 2016, 14:09
Definitely not.:
Même pas 8D

she figured its purpose out → she figured out its purpose

He was about to continue figuring out the rest of the puzzle when he stopped dead in his tracks. Apparently, our favorite blue-haired idiot had found something. Hey, am I dreaming or is that panel kinda... broken? He pointed towards the opposite side of the bridge, where one of the white panels that made up the room seemed to have been bent enough make a human body slide behind it. Behind the decor? Why?


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 15 Juil 2016, 01:28
So you've got no magic in you? D8 :
Je sais jamais où le foutre, ce out XD Vu qu'on dit "to figure things out" (enfin je crois xD) ben je suis toujours perdue avec ce verbe :p

Wow, maybe they wouldn't have to cross the pool, after all. Without second thought, she moved from her position, making the bridge disappear. Lucky Noah: he wasn't on it yet. And as a matter of fact, he was right, the panel was broken. Unknown had a look behind: it was gloomy but passable. Should we try this way?



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Dim 07 Aoû 2016, 12:52
Why on earth would I?:
Without second thought → "without a second thought" (You don't need the article in the plural, f.e. "Not having second thoughts, are you?")
Unknown had a look behind → "Unknown looked behind it" or just "Unknown had a quick look"

Listen... either we continue on this death course with the risk of either of us falling in a pool of acid, OR we say fuck this, bend the rules, and stop playing the fucking game. I know what I'm choosing. The answer seemed so logical that he didn't even consider Unknown might wanna try something else entirely. Noah was already en route.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Sam 03 Sep 2016, 19:22
I don't know, maybe because you should! :
8D

She didn't intend to argue with him anyway. He was right and she asked only because she wasn't sure that he was the kind of guy to bend the rules. And obviously, she didn't want to go on her own. Not being able to remember anything before five minutes ago was disturbing enough. What the hell was wrong with this place? And what the hell was wrong with her?!



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 07 Oct 2016, 23:36
You're right. Maybe I should.:
she asked only → she only asked
before five minutes ago → before the last five minutes

YOLO. Whatever was outside of these creepyass white rooms must be better than... well, these creepyass white rooms. Even just the fact that they were rebelling against the system (YOLO, again) that tried to push them on this parcours proved to Noah they were doing the right wrong thing. And... well... YOLO. Prepare yourself. It might not be as "friendly" behind the scenes, said the guy who just avoided a fall into deadly acid.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 22 Mar 2017, 02:27
Yeah, so... Are you gonna do something about it? :
Amagad, tout ce temps déjà ?! =.=
I'm so sorry D8

Yeah, right. She said. Having no memory of the past rooms, she still said it with a little hint of "friendly would definitely not be the word I'd choose for this place". I mean, the acid pool alone was a powerfull human being repellent! She followed the guy behind the broken panel and discovered an in-wall, well, pretty messy but not as creepy as expected. The test subjects are not allowed out of the test chambers. The staff would be most grateful if you would step back into the room. Said a metallic voice.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 28 Avr 2017, 01:55
I can't.:
discovered an in-wall → whot u mean, bruv?*

*What do you mean, brother?

"Most grateful", my ass, Noah muttered. If that metallic bitch wants to stop us, she's gonna have to try harder. He proceeded with his escape, entering a room that only seemed to host a fire escape. Stairs. That made sense, considering the elevators they previously took. Ok, lets see what's up there. The climb up commenced.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 01 Mai 2017, 13:09
Gh- You're killing me, you know that? :
Je voulais parler de l'intérieur du mur, mais maintenant je me rends compte de la confusion XD "in-wall" ça veut dire à l'intérieur d'un truc entouré de murs, right, pas vraiment l'intérieur d'un mur xD /SPIF/

There was a lot of noise around them, like a factory or something. And sparkles. They stood now on a footbridge and the space on the left was so big they couldn't even see the floor underneath. On the right, moving panels were changing the shape of the wall. At the end of the footbridge, in front of them, was a narrow passage to the darkness. The place is so very creepy. What are we doing here again?



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Lun 01 Mai 2017, 16:11
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I might be aware:
Nan en fait je pense que ça veut rien dire du tout XD J'ai prit ça comme "elle a découvert un truc derrière le mur" au final. Mais j'aurais pu le prendre comme "isolation" ? Tu voulais dire l'intérieur comme quand ils étaient entre deux murs au début du RP ?

sparkles → A sparkle is like... from a diamond, from a star, bling-bling, cute. A spark is from electricity, which I think you mean here since you mentioned a factory. But if you meant sparkles, nevermind me !
They stood now on a footbridge → They now stood on [...] (word order)

Damned if I know. Noah sighed. He thought it was a rhetorical question. Like "why are we even here ?" Frankly, he couldn't give her a good reason anyway. It's like his memory was slipping. He still remembers a dead city, the car, the cabin, then the factory... but why did they come here again ? Logic wants him to answer "because this is the only logical course of action", except it wasn't logical at all. If the earth was silent and the only thing left alive was weird killer robots and one silly factory in the middle of nowhere, surely that's the last place you go to, right ? Ah well.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 21 Juil 2017, 00:47
Soooo maybe you could draw some for me? :
Han mais j'ai même pas pensé à aller vérifier, chuis con >.> J'ai cru qu'on était seulement passées au travers, au final XD /BIM/

I meant "sparks" indeed 8D
Gah. Word order. Kills me every time x.x I'm struggling hard with where to put those little words in sentences XD But I'll never quit trying
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Well well well... So she wasn't going to have any answer this way. Too subtle, I guess. And not at all logical for him to answer that question in a different way since she obviously should know how she got there in the first place. Well then, she was to ask directly. She stopped dead. Okay. I have ten minutes memory, tops. What are we doing here? This... facility seems way too dangerous for... any living being.

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"Well then, she was to ask directly." → Not sure of that one. J'ai l'impression d'entendre ce genre de formulation dans des séries ou films, genre "You are to do something". Mais c'est peut-être juste du langage familier parce que d'un point de vue grammatical, chuis vraiment pas sûre que ça passe à l'écrit XD



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Jeu 27 Juil 2017, 14:28
Alright, give me a pencil.:
So she wasn't going to have any answer this way → "any" usually presupposes a plural, so answers. And to "have an answer" is something you use in the context "She has an answer for everything", but here she wants to receive an answer from Noah, so it's best to use "she wasn't going to get/receive any answers this way". (Even though good grammar dictates not to use "to get" anywhere because it's too familiar. One of those words you can put anywhere and which means everything 8D)
since she obviously should know how she got there in the first place → "since she obviously should've known how she got here in the first place" (just tenses here + "here" since she's referring to where they are now at this moment and not another place).
Well then, she was to ask directly → The "was to/were to" thing is only used for hypothetical situations in the future (ex. "If Noah were to ask you out... would you accept ?" or "If you are to do that, then..." (si.../tu...)). This is not that situation, so just same tense as before : "Well, then she was going to be direct" / "She would ask him immediately". Ah yes, that reminds me that "directly" doesn't translate like "directement". Immediately is a more correct translation. Directly is usually foooor.... hmm.... It's not related to time as much ? More like a direction/path ? Like... (ok I had to look up example sentences here cause I couldn't come up with any ! XD) "He shot it directly into the garbage can" / "The path leads directly to the lake". But apparently that's more of an American English thing cause the Brits like to use it in a more "He'll be here directly, sir." way. So take from that whatever you want ! o/
I have ten minutes memory, topsI have a ten-minute memory or I have ten minutes of memory (FYI, both make her sound like a robot ! XD)

... you lost your memory again ? But you didn't even sleep ! Don't tell him it's mutating or something. God, that's the last thing he needs. Soon they'll be down to the speed round where her memory only lasts for 30 seconds. Like a fucking goldfish. Okay, breathe, Noah. In and out. Be at peace. He groaned and massaged his face like an old man with too many kids. Okay... okay... So... here's the thing... I don't feel like explaining. Well how gallant ! You probably wouldn't believe me anyway.


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Ven 28 Juil 2017, 01:18
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Here... :
Alright, thank you so much XD Pis j'ai bien rigolé au passage, merci XD

She stared at him with disbelief. After a pool of acid? I seriously doubt that but okay. She said. I don't like the sound of that like at all, but still, is there something I should be careful about? Only that. Just to known. I mean, if there was bigfoots or, I don't known, evil clowns, she needed to be prepared. At least, as prepared as you can be in such a situation.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 22 Aoû 2017, 17:09
Aaaaand, there you go. New eyebrows!:
She stared at him with disbeliefin disbelief
is there something I should be careful about? → "be careful of something" in this context
Just to known → typo : know.

What's the point ? You'll forget in 10 minutes. Nah. I seriously do not feel like repeating myself. Just follow me and don't die. And that's that. Conversation over. It's not like she would care for very long, cause there was another blue-ish barrier ahead. She'd forget this conversation anyway. Man, that's crap!


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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mar 22 Aoû 2017, 18:46
Cool! D'you have a mirror? :
Rhoo, prépo et typo xD /BIM/

Yeah, he was probably right. She just wasn't used to forget that fast. Don't die, don't die. She mumbled. Easy to s–. Blue-ish barrier happened. She blinked for a second... A guy (knew the face), an open space (cold and messy), and some really dirty windows that you couldn't see through. Or maybe you could but there wasn't much to see.



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Re: The city that never sleepsle Mer 23 Aoû 2017, 02:15
What more do you need from me ?:
Rieeeeeeeen !

Damn. This place gets worse by the minute. He muttered. Noah wasn't entirely convinced this was the easiest way out of here after all. Actually he wasn't entirely convinced this was a way out at all. They were probably just throwing themselves deeper into killer-robot infested waters. His ability was completely useless. The "THERE IS NO ESCAPE" written in red liquid (blood?) on the opposite side of the room wasn't very reassuring either.


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